View Full Version : A article written by me regarding Ron Artest
06-30-2004, 08:03 PM
:thumbsup: I generally agree!
I liked it.
06-30-2004, 09:48 PM
Very nice! :thumbup: I hope to read more once things start happening.
There are a few grammatical errors, but nothing huge. In the second paragraph, you might want to differentiate between the two seasons more clearly. On first read, I wasn't sure which year you said he was DPOY runner-up and which year he won.
But minor grievances aside, a solid article.
06-30-2004, 11:43 PM
Ah, life after high school. I too, graduated this spring.... right now, I have some free time on my hands [working part-time at the YMCA], but come autumn.... :shudder:
06-30-2004, 11:46 PM
Not bad at all.
Personal pet peeve (hey, you put it out there, I get to grade it...my wife's a teacher) anyway. When you mean (belongs to them) it is their not "there". At least you were consistant with it (3 times) and of course the "they are" is they're.
07-01-2004, 11:13 AM
Great job. The only thing I noticed besides what has already been stated is that Artest averaged 18 ppg last year not 16.
07-02-2004, 01:13 PM
Very nice. :thumbsup: Keep it up.
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